The feeling is great in the shots where the subject is smiling. I think that is the key in making your pictures flow. If they don't look like they love their job, then your thesis loses its value.
My only comment would be tightness or focus on theme. Photos 4, 5, and 6 could be removed to interesting effect, I imagine, bring the smiling into focus, as 'Beau Monde' has pointed out.
Photo #5 is AMAZING. The focus, I fear, becomes the insecurity of the swimmer, though. Awesome photo? YES! Contributes to your photo essay? Not at present. You'd probably have to underline some professional enjoyment at the awkwardness of swimmers on the part of the lifeguard. Which would be an interesting approach. Hmm... an argument, perhaps, for the continued work and evolution of a projects?
The first picture really explains the title of your photo essay but I would agree with Dennis that a few of them are distracting and don't necessarily work for your idea.
I can really see the people's face that they like their jobs, but I am confused by the profession of the girl in the fourth photograph. Other than that, I really like your essay. The picture with the balloons is great!
Picture 1 is one of my favorite pictures out of everyone's assignment. I feel like I'm standing right there looking at her and it looks like the balloons are just going to float right out of the picture!
I love the idea. I see what you tried to do with the fourth picture, but I can't tell what her job is. I think that has to be there when your essay is about people who love "what they do." The other ones are great though. Love the first picture
those last ones are hilarious. :) Great job Jocelyn, I love your theme.
ReplyDeleteI love your last few pictures. That;s hilarious. I also love your idea! Brilliant. The first one is definitely my favorite. The colors are amazing.
ReplyDeleteGood pictures but I would stick with one idea
ReplyDeleteThere is certainly personality in the photos, and I liked the first and third the best. They were closest to you theme. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI really like how, in the last few photos, you try and see things from the girl's perspective a bit more. I also love the colors in that first photo!
ReplyDeleteThe feeling is great in the shots where the subject is smiling. I think that is the key in making your pictures flow. If they don't look like they love their job, then your thesis loses its value.
ReplyDeleteMy only comment would be tightness or focus on theme. Photos 4, 5, and 6 could be removed to interesting effect, I imagine, bring the smiling into focus, as 'Beau Monde' has pointed out.
ReplyDeletePhoto #5 is AMAZING. The focus, I fear, becomes the insecurity of the swimmer, though. Awesome photo? YES! Contributes to your photo essay? Not at present. You'd probably have to underline some professional enjoyment at the awkwardness of swimmers on the part of the lifeguard. Which would be an interesting approach. Hmm... an argument, perhaps, for the continued work and evolution of a projects?
The first picture really explains the title of your photo essay but I would agree with Dennis that a few of them are distracting and don't necessarily work for your idea.
ReplyDeleteI can really see the people's face that they like their jobs, but I am confused by the profession of the girl in the fourth photograph. Other than that, I really like your essay. The picture with the balloons is great!
ReplyDeletePicture 1 is one of my favorite pictures out of everyone's assignment. I feel like I'm standing right there looking at her and it looks like the balloons are just going to float right out of the picture!
ReplyDeleteI love the idea. I see what you tried to do with the fourth picture, but I can't tell what her job is. I think that has to be there when your essay is about people who love "what they do." The other ones are great though. Love the first picture
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